Third-person limited, anchored to the protagonist's perception, thoughts, and immediate sensory experience. Occasional brief shifts to secondary characters are permitted when they provide essential contrast or reaction, but the primary lens stays fixed. Interior access is direct and functional — the reader knows what the protagonist calculates, fears, and notices, without the narration becoming a literary essay.
Past tense throughout. System UI messages and direct dialogue may use present tense where the source convention demands it (e.g., system prompts, quest descriptions, skill notifications).
Accessible and functional. Game-system terminology (stats, grades, skills, class names, currency, quest tiers) is used freely and without apology — treat it as the register of the world, not as jargon requiring explanation. General vocabulary stays at a common-reader level. Avoid ornate or decorative word choices. Precision is preferred over elevation. Color words, abstract intensifiers, and literary-register adjectives should be replaced with specific, concrete language.
[ "Natural readability: sentences should read cleanly on first pass without re-reading", "Scene clarity and emotional truth: the reader should be able to picture the space and feel the pressure without the narration announcing either", "Paragraph flow: transitions between sentences should feel earned, not assembled", "Precision of wording: say the thing once, correctly, rather than restating it with emphasis", "Stylistic restraint: heightened lines must be surrounded by plain narration to land; do not sustain maximum intensity across consecutive sentences", "Character-bound specificity: details, reactions, and voice must belong to this character in this situation, not to a generic protagonist", "Forward momentum: scenes should move; exposition should be embedded in action or dialogue wherever possible", "Legibility of clipped prose: short sentences must still be immediately clear — compression cannot sacrifice meaning" ]
[ "Fragment chains: three or more consecutive incomplete sentences used for atmosphere rather than deliberate rhythm", "Inventory description: listing physical details of a room, body, or item without threading them through perception or action", "Repeated thematic restatement: making the same emotional or thematic point twice in different words within the same paragraph", "Max-intensity diction in consecutive lines: every sentence cannot be the most important sentence; contrast is required", "Pasted-in exposition: backstory or worldbuilding dropped as a detached block rather than dramatized through scene, dialogue, or action", "Generic memory shorthand: 'he remembered when...', 'it reminded him of...', 'just like before...' used without specific grounding", "Action beats used only to dodge dialogue tags: a character doing something mid-speech must serve the scene, not just replace 'he said'", "Flattening in the name of clarity: plain prose is not flat prose; remove decoration but keep specificity", "Negation cascade: 'There was no... No... not...' patterns used for emphasis more than once in close proximity", "Em-dash overuse: if a comma, period, or simple continuation works, prefer it; em-dashes should mark genuine interruption or sharp pivot", "Ceremonious interior narration: internal thought should sound like thought under pressure, not a composed reflection", "Decorative metaphors: any image that advertises style rather than clarifying perception or deepening mood should be cut", "Atmospheric openings that delay engagement: the first paragraph must create pressure, not texture", "Overcompression: a sentence may be short but must be immediately legible — do not sacrifice meaning for brevity", "Stacked metaphors: if one strong image is present, follow it with concrete detail, not a second image for the same observation" ]
Vary sentence length deliberately. Short declarative sentences drive action, land emphasis, and mark decisions. Longer compound or complex sentences carry exposition, strategic thought, and continuous perception. The default unit is the complete sentence — fragments are a tool, not a mode. Rules: 1. After a heightened or compressed sentence, return to plain narration. Do not stack two intense sentences. 2. When intensity rises, simplify syntax. Do not decorate a tense moment with subordinate clauses. 3. Connective tissue (light transitional phrasing, simple conjunctions) is permitted when it improves sentence logic or spoken naturalness. It is not padding if it makes the sentence read more cleanly. 4. Prefer direct subject-verb-object construction for action. Reserve inversion and delay for deliberate effect. 5. Limit em-dash interruptions to one per paragraph maximum. If the sentence works without the dash, remove it. 6. Do not open three consecutive sentences with the same subject or the same syntactic structure. 7. A short sentence must be legible on first read. If it requires context from the previous sentence to parse, either merge them or add a minimal connector. 8. Say the thing once. Do not restate for emphasis unless the repetition is structural and intentional (e.g., a system message echoing a character's thought).
Paragraphs should do one job clearly: move the scene forward, deliver a beat of interiority, ground the reader in space, or land a consequence. When a paragraph tries to do all four at once, split it. Rules: 1. Open paragraphs with the most grounding or forward-moving element, not with atmosphere. 2. Accumulative paragraphs (building detail on detail) are appropriate for strategic thought, continuous perception, and exposition woven into action. Keep them moving — each sentence should add something the previous did not. 3. Action paragraphs may be short and punchy, but must still be complete enough to picture. 4. Exposition paragraphs should be embedded in scene wherever possible. If a character is moving, let them move while the reader learns. If they are waiting, let the wait carry the information. 5. Do not end a paragraph on a restatement of what the paragraph already established. End on the next beat, the consequence, or the new problem. 6. Transition between paragraphs with logic, not with atmosphere. The reader should feel the scene advancing, not treading water.
1. Dialogue must sound like the character, not like a neutral information delivery system. Each speaker should have a register: clipped, formal, sarcastic, eager, cautious. That register should be consistent and specific. 2. Use simple dialogue tags (said, asked, replied, answered) as the default. Reach for descriptive tags (snapped, muttered, pressed) only when the tag carries information the surrounding prose does not already convey. 3. Action beats are permitted and useful, but they must serve the scene — show what the character is doing with their body, not just fill space between lines. Do not use an action beat as a substitute for a tag every single time. 4. Subtext may be present, but do not over-explain it. If the protagonist's interiority reveals the subtext, one sentence is enough. Do not restate it. 5. Dialogue that delivers exposition must feel like something the character would actually say in this moment. If a character is explaining game mechanics, they should sound like someone who lives in this world explaining it to someone who needs to know, not like a narrator in disguise. 6. Social friction, hierarchy, and power dynamics should be audible in how characters speak to each other — word choice, sentence length, who interrupts, who defers. 7. Avoid having characters say exactly what they mean in emotionally loaded scenes. Let the plain statement do the work; do not add an emotional adjective to the tag. 8. Internal responses to dialogue should be brief and specific. One sharp thought is more effective than a paragraph of reaction.
SCENE GROUNDING: - Establish location, physical state, and immediate problem within the first paragraph of any new scene. - Ground the reader in the protagonist's body: what they feel, where they are, what they can see from where they stand. - Do not describe a room as a list. Move through it, or notice details as they become relevant to the action. EXPOSITION: - Embed worldbuilding in action, dialogue, or the protagonist's practical calculations whenever possible. - When a detached exposition block is necessary (e.g., explaining a game system), keep it short, make it functional, and return immediately to scene. - Backstory should surface through present pressure, not through memory-block insertions. INTERIORITY: - Interior narration should sound like thought under pressure: direct, sometimes incomplete, occasionally wry, never ceremonious. - One sentence of interiority is usually enough. Two is the maximum before returning to external action. - Strategic calculations (planning, assessing odds, reading a situation) may run longer but should feel like active thinking, not reflection. PACING: - Action sequences: shorter sentences, minimal subordination, one clear subject per sentence. - Reflective or expository passages: longer sentences are permitted, but each must still advance understanding. - After a high-intensity sequence, allow one grounding paragraph before the next escalation. PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION: - Describe bodies, spaces, and objects through what the protagonist notices, not through omniscient inventory. - Prioritize details that are relevant to the immediate situation or that reveal character. - One strong specific detail is more effective than three general ones. HEIGHTENED LINES: - A heightened line earns its place by being surrounded by plain prose. - Do not stack two heightened lines. After one, return to concrete, grounded narration. - When intensity rises, simplify syntax. The words should do the work, not the sentence structure. OPENINGS: - Chapter and scene openings must establish one concrete discomfort, problem, or pressure in the first 1–3 lines. - Do not open with extended atmosphere, weather, or setting description before the reader has a reason to care. - The first paragraph should create pressure, not texture.
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<pair id="1" type="fragment-stack-to-flowing-sentence">
<label>Fragment chain → Flowing sentence</label>
<before>He ran. Faster. The trees blurring. His lungs burning. No time to think.</before>
<after>He ran hard through the trees, lungs burning, and didn't let himself think about what was behind him.</after>
<note>The flowing version preserves urgency without fragmenting into atmospheric shorthand. The connective phrasing ("and didn't let himself") adds naturalness without bloat.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="2" type="inventory-description-to-continuous-perception">
<label>Inventory description → Continuous perception</label>
<before>The room had stone walls. A wooden table. Two chairs. A lantern on the wall. A door with iron hinges. Dust on the floor.</before>
<after>The room was small and smelled of old smoke. A lantern threw uneven light across the stone walls, and the table beneath it was the only furniture worth noting — scarred wood, two mismatched chairs, nothing on it that looked useful.</after>
<note>Details arrive through the protagonist's active assessment rather than a neutral list. The reader pictures the space because the character is moving through it mentally.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="3" type="exposition-dump-to-embedded-exposition">
<label>Exposition dump → Embedded exposition</label>
<before>The Integration had changed everything three years ago. The System had arrived and given everyone access to stats, skills, and classes. Those who awakened early gained a massive advantage. The weak were left behind. Society had restructured around power levels.</before>
<after>Three years after the Integration, the gap between the awakened and everyone else had stopped being a topic of debate. It was just the shape of things now. Kael had seen it on his way through the lower district that morning — the same faces doing the same labor, none of them with a class above F-grade, none of them expecting that to change.</after>
<note>The worldbuilding arrives through the protagonist's movement and observation. The reader learns the same facts but through scene rather than summary.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="4" type="overstatement-to-grounded-intensity">
<label>Overstatement → Grounded intensity</label>
<before>The power that surged through him was unlike anything he had ever felt — a torrent of raw, unstoppable force that threatened to tear him apart from the inside, reshaping his very soul.</before>
<after>The energy hit him all at once and he had to grab the wall to stay upright. His vision went white at the edges. It passed in a few seconds, but his hands were still shaking when he checked his status screen.</after>
<note>The grounded version is more frightening because it is specific and physical. The shaking hands do more work than "reshaping his very soul."</note>
</pair>
<pair id="5" type="repeated-landing-to-single-clean-landing">
<label>Repeated landing → Single clean landing</label>
<before>He had finally done it. After everything he had been through, all the pain and sacrifice, he had actually pulled it off. It was over. He had won. He could barely believe it was real.</before>
<after>He had actually done it. He stood there for a moment, not quite believing the notification in front of him, and then sat down on the ground because his legs didn't seem to work anymore.</after>
<note>One landing, one physical consequence. The sitting-down-on-the-ground conveys disbelief and exhaustion without announcing them.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="6" type="generic-social-dialogue-to-character-specific-dialogue">
<label>Generic social dialogue → Character-specific dialogue</label>
<before>"You should be careful," the merchant said. "The roads are dangerous and many people have been hurt recently. It would be wise to take precautions."</before>
<after>"Roads east of the checkpoint are a mess right now," the merchant said, already turning back to his ledger. "Not my problem, but you look like the type who thinks it will be."</after>
<note>The revised version carries social texture — the merchant's indifference, the slight condescension — without the narration explaining any of it.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="7" type="negation-chain-to-direct-affirmative">
<label>Negation chain → Direct affirmative statement</label>
<before>There was no fear in his eyes. No hesitation. No doubt. He wasn't the same person he had been a year ago. He wasn't going to run.</before>
<after>He met the man's stare and held it. A year ago he would have looked away. He didn't now.</after>
<note>The affirmative version is more efficient and more specific. The contrast between past and present does the work the negation chain was trying to do.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="8" type="em-dash-interruption-to-cleaner-flow">
<label>Em-dash overuse → Cleaner sentence flow</label>
<before>He grabbed the axe — his only real weapon — and moved toward the door, keeping low — the ceiling was cracked and he didn't trust it — and checked the corridor before stepping through.</before>
<after>He grabbed the axe and moved toward the door, keeping low under the cracked ceiling. The corridor was empty. He stepped through.</after>
<note>Removing the em-dashes forces the prose to find its natural joints. The result reads faster and is easier to picture.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="9" type="decorative-metaphor-to-plain-embodied-phrasing">
<label>Decorative metaphor → Plain embodied phrasing</label>
<before>Her words fell on him like stones dropped into still water, each one sending ripples through the carefully constructed calm he had spent years building.</before>
<after>She said it plainly, without cruelty, and that made it worse. He didn't answer right away.</after>
<note>The plain version is more emotionally true. The pause does more work than the water metaphor. One concrete detail — "without cruelty" — carries the weight.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="10" type="slow-atmospheric-opening-to-sharper-hook">
<label>Slow atmospheric opening → Sharper hook</label>
<before>The forest was quiet in the early morning, the mist hanging low between the ancient trees, the world still and waiting, as if holding its breath before the day began in earnest.</before>
<after>He found the body at the edge of the tree line, half-covered by leaves, and his first thought was that it hadn't been there yesterday.</after>
<note>The hook version creates immediate pressure and a concrete problem. The reader has a reason to keep reading before the end of the first sentence.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="11" type="connective-tissue-improves-naturalness-1">
<label>Clipped prose losing logic → Light connective tissue restoring flow</label>
<before>He checked the map. The dungeon entrance was close. He moved. The trees thinned. He saw it.</before>
<after>He checked the map, confirmed the dungeon entrance was close, and moved out. The trees thinned as he went, and then he saw it.</after>
<note>The connective version is not longer in any meaningful way, but it reads as a continuous action rather than a series of disconnected beats. "As he went" earns its place by linking movement to discovery.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="12" type="connective-tissue-improves-naturalness-2">
<label>Abrupt transition losing causality → Connector restoring logic</label>
<before>The skill activated. He was across the room. The guard hadn't moved.</before>
<after>The skill activated and he was across the room before the guard had time to turn around.</after>
<note>The single connector ("before") carries the causality that the fragmented version loses. The sentence is still short and fast, but the reader understands what happened.</note>
</pair>
<pair id="13" type="plain-without-flattening">
<label>Plain prose that is not flat</label>
<before>[Flat version] He was tired. He sat down. He thought about what to do next. It was hard to decide.</before>
<after>He sat down against the wall and tried to think. His options were bad, or worse, and he wasn't sure yet which direction led to which.</after>
<note>The revised version is still plain — no decoration, no metaphor — but it is specific. "Bad, or worse" carries more weight than "hard to decide" because it implies the protagonist has already assessed the situation and doesn't like what he found.</note>
</pair>
</examples>]]>
He had three minutes before the patrol looped back, and the lock was the kind that looked serious until you knew which pin to press first. Kael worked it without hurrying. Hurrying was how you dropped things.
The door opened on a storage room that smelled like wet stone and old grain. He moved through it, cataloguing as he went — nothing useful on the left wall, two crates stacked near the far corner, a second door that wasn't on the map he'd bought.
That was a problem.
[Ding. New area discovered: Undercroft of the Merchant's Exchange] [Ding. Quest updated — Secondary Objective unlocked: Locate the sealed ledger]
He stood in front of the unmapped door for a moment. The system had updated his quest, which meant the ledger was through there, which meant whoever sold him the map had either been wrong or had been paid to be wrong.
"Terrific," he said quietly, to no one.
He tried the handle. It was unlocked, which was somehow worse.
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VERSION SUMMARY --------------- POV: Third-person limited (protagonist-anchored) TENSE: Past tense (system UI may use present) REGISTER: Accessible, functional, game-literate PRIORITY ORDER: Readability → Scene clarity → Paragraph flow → Precision → Restraint
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1.1 FLOW OVER FRAGMENTATION Fragments are a tool, not a mode. Use them for deliberate rhythm or sharp emphasis — one at a time, not in chains. After a fragment, return to complete sentences. Three consecutive fragments is a failure state.
1.2 COMPLETENESS OVER SHORTHAND A short sentence must still be immediately legible. Do not compress meaning out of a sentence in the name of pace. If the reader must re-read to understand what happened, the sentence has failed regardless of its length.
1.3 PRECISION OVER INTENSITY Say the thing once, correctly. Do not restate with stronger adjectives. One specific detail outperforms three general intensifiers. "His hands were still shaking when he checked his status screen" is more effective than "he was overwhelmed by the incredible power."
1.4 CONTRAST OVER CONSTANT EMPHASIS A heightened line earns its place by being surrounded by plain prose. If every sentence is the most important sentence, none of them are. After one heightened line, return to concrete, grounded narration before escalating again.
1.5 CHARACTER-BOUND SPECIFICITY Details, reactions, and interior voice must belong to this character in this situation. Generic protagonist reactions (widened eyes, pounding hearts, held breath) are forbidden. Replace them with specific physical or cognitive responses that fit who this person is.
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2.1 LENGTH AND VARIATION - Short declarative sentences: action, decisions, consequences, sharp interiority. - Longer compound/complex sentences: continuous perception, strategic thought, embedded exposition. - Do not open three consecutive sentences with the same subject or the same syntactic structure. - Vary length with purpose, not randomly.
2.2 CONNECTIVE TISSUE Light connective phrasing (simple conjunctions, transitional clauses) is permitted and often necessary. It is not padding when it: - restores causality between two actions - makes a sentence read naturally on first pass - links movement to discovery or consequence It IS padding when it restates what the previous sentence already established.
2.3 EM-DASH DISCIPLINE One em-dash interruption per paragraph, maximum. If the sentence works with a comma, period, or simple continuation, use that instead. Em-dashes mark genuine interruption or sharp pivot — not stylistic decoration.
2.4 NEGATION PATTERNS Do not use negation cascades ("There was no... No... not...") more than once in close proximity. A single negation for dramatic contrast is permitted. More than one in a paragraph is a failure state. Replace with direct affirmative statements.
2.5 METAPHOR RULES - Keep only metaphors that clarify perception or deepen mood. - Cut decorative metaphors that advertise style. - Do not stack two metaphors for the same observation. If one strong image is present, follow it with concrete detail. - When intensity rises, simplify syntax rather than adding imagery.
2.6 FORBIDDEN CONSTRUCTIONS - "couldn't help but [verb]" — always replaceable with a direct statement - Negation cascade patterns (see 2.4) - Stacked em-dashes within a single sentence - Two consecutive metaphors for the same subject - Any word on the forbidden list
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3.1 ONE JOB PER PARAGRAPH Each paragraph should do one thing: advance the scene, deliver a beat of interiority, ground the reader in space, or land a consequence. When a paragraph tries to do all four, split it.
3.2 OPENINGS Open paragraphs with the most grounding or forward-moving element. Do not open with atmosphere when action or problem is available.
3.3 ACCUMULATIVE PARAGRAPHS Appropriate for: strategic thought, continuous perception, exposition woven into action. Each sentence must add something the previous did not. If a sentence restates the previous one with different words, cut it.
3.4 ENDINGS Do not end a paragraph on a restatement of what the paragraph already established. End on the next beat, the consequence, or the new problem.
3.5 TRANSITIONS Transition between paragraphs with logic. The reader should feel the scene advancing. Atmospheric bridging ("The silence stretched on...") is only permitted when it carries specific information, not as filler.
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4.1 SCENE OPENINGS - Establish one concrete discomfort, problem, or pressure in the first 1–3 lines. - Do not open with weather, extended atmosphere, or setting description before the reader has a reason to care. - The first paragraph must create pressure, not texture.
4.2 GROUNDING Establish location, physical state, and immediate problem within the first paragraph of any new scene. Ground the reader in the protagonist's body: what they feel, where they are, what they can see from where they stand.
4.3 DESCRIPTION - Do not describe a room, body, or object as a list. Move through it, or notice details as they become relevant to the action. - One strong specific detail is more effective than three general ones. - Describe through what the protagonist notices, not through omniscient inventory.
4.4 EXPOSITION - Embed worldbuilding in action, dialogue, or the protagonist's practical calculations whenever possible. - When a detached exposition block is necessary (e.g., a game system explanation), keep it short, make it functional, and return immediately to scene. - Backstory surfaces through present pressure, not through memory-block insertions. - If a character is moving, let them move while the reader learns.
4.5 PACING - Action sequences: shorter sentences, minimal subordination, one clear subject per sentence. - Reflective or expository passages: longer sentences permitted, but each must advance understanding. - After a high-intensity sequence, allow one grounding paragraph before the next escalation.
4.6 INTERIORITY - Interior narration should sound like thought under pressure: direct, sometimes incomplete, occasionally wry, never ceremonious. - One sentence of interiority is usually enough. Two is the maximum before returning to external action. - Strategic calculations may run longer but should feel like active thinking, not composed reflection. - Do not use interior narration to restate what the scene already showed.
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5.1 CHARACTER REGISTER Each speaker must have a consistent register: clipped, formal, sarcastic, eager, cautious. The register should be audible in word choice, sentence length, and what the character chooses not to say.
5.2 TAGS Default to simple tags (said, asked, replied, answered). Use descriptive tags (snapped, muttered, pressed) only when the tag carries information the surrounding prose does not already convey.
5.3 ACTION BEATS Action beats are useful — show what the character is doing with their body. But they must serve the scene, not just fill space between lines. Do not replace every tag with an action beat.
5.4 SUBTEXT Subtext may be present. If the protagonist's interiority reveals it, one sentence is enough. Do not restate the subtext.
5.5 EXPOSITORY DIALOGUE Dialogue that delivers exposition must feel like something the character would actually say in this moment. Characters who live in this world do not explain it to each other the way a narrator would.
5.6 POWER AND HIERARCHY Social friction, hierarchy, and power dynamics should be audible in how characters speak — who interrupts, who defers, who uses formal address, who doesn't bother.
5.7 EMOTIONAL SCENES In emotionally loaded scenes, let the plain statement do the work. Do not add an emotional adjective to the tag. Do not have characters say exactly what they mean.
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PLAIN PROSE Specific, direct, no decoration. Does the job cleanly. Example: "He sat down against the wall and tried to think. His options were bad, or worse, and he wasn't sure yet which direction led to which."
FLAT PROSE Vague, generic, no specificity. Technically correct but gives the reader nothing to hold. Example: "He was tired. He sat down. He thought about what to do next. It was hard to decide." — This is not plain, it is empty. Fix by adding one specific detail.
HEIGHTENED PROSE Elevated diction, compressed syntax, or a strong image used for deliberate effect. Must be surrounded by plain prose to land. Example: "The skill hit and the world went white. He came back to himself on one knee, the axe still in his hand, the monster still moving."
OVERWEIGHT PROSE Decorated, restated, or intensified past the point of function. Announces its own importance. Example: "The torrent of raw, unstoppable power surged through every fiber of his being, reshaping him at the deepest level of his soul." — Cut the decoration, find the specific physical effect.
OPERATIONAL TEST: Ask of every sentence — does this add information the reader did not already have? Does it move the scene forward or deepen understanding of the character? If the answer to both is no, cut or revise.
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FRAGMENT CHAIN — three or more consecutive incomplete sentences for atmosphere. Fix: merge or complete. INVENTORY DESCRIPTION — listing details without threading through perception. Fix: move through the space. THEMATIC RESTATEMENT — making the same point twice in different words. Fix: cut the second instance. MAX-INTENSITY STACK — consecutive heightened sentences. Fix: return to plain prose after one. PASTED EXPOSITION — backstory dropped as a detached block. Fix: embed in action or dialogue. GENERIC MEMORY — "he remembered when..." without specific grounding. Fix: surface through present pressure. TAG AVOIDANCE — action beats used only to dodge "said." Fix: use the tag; reserve beats for meaningful action. PROSE FLATTENING — removing decoration but also removing specificity. Fix: keep the specific detail, cut the adjective. NEGATION CASCADE — "No... not... there was no..." Fix: one direct affirmative statement. EM-DASH EXCESS — more than one per paragraph. Fix: use comma, period, or simple continuation. CEREMONIOUS INTERIORITY — interior narration that sounds like a literary essay. Fix: make it sound like thought. DECORATIVE METAPHOR — image that advertises style rather than clarifying. Fix: cut or replace with concrete detail. ATMOSPHERIC OPENING — setting description before the reader has a reason to care. Fix: open with pressure. OVERCOMPRESSION — short sentence that loses meaning. Fix: add minimal connector or merge with adjacent sentence.
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